precious gems (troiku)

kusa no ha [ya] ame ni magirenu aki no tsuyu

blades of grass–
lost among the raindrops
autumn dew
© Issa (1810)(tr. David Lanoue)

blades of grass
snail crawls warily
in the everglades

lost among the raindrops
heartbroken
a lover’s tears

autumn dew
morning frost glints
like GrandPa’s gold tooth

©Tournesol’17/10/27

I have used Issa Kobayashi’s beautiful haiku as an inspiration at Heeding Haiku with Chevrefeuille at MindLoveMiserysMenagerie and decided to use his haiku  to form a troiku .  A troiku is a new form of haiku created by our host, Chevrefeuile which he explains on his website Chevrefeuillecarpediem.

6 thoughts on “precious gems (troiku)

  1. kaykuala

    morning frost glints
    like GrandPa’s gold tooth

    Like the humor! Grandpa likes to be remembered in all ‘brightness’!

    Hank

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    1. Thanks, Hank. I had a more romantic ending but then I thought of Issa who sometimes adds humour and the unexpected in his last line. And of course, GrandPapa is always on my mind:) Thanks for dropping by, Cheryl-Lynn

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