Thankful moments (troibun)

wistfully holds
futures passed and gone
scent of promise

wistfully holds
visions of newlyweds
his heart quickens

futures passed and gone
offspring born and grown
love for her transcends

scent of promise
flourishing with each grain
passion begotten

The sky began its concert, with hues that melt his heart. His wife shouts from a distance, “Mon amour nous sommes tous à la table, viens vite, nous t’attendons!”He slowly turns to go and looks with love at his hand, “I love the handful of the earth you are.”

Happy Thanksgiving!

Written for MindLoveMiserysMenagerie – Sunday Writing Prompt 223 – We are inspired by a sonnet by Pablo Neruda and we can take any line or the entire poem to inspire a story. I have chosen to write a Troiku with a narrative which I call a Troibun (taken from Haibun)  A Troiku is a new form of haiku created by Chevrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.

Sonnet XVI by Pablo Neruda

I love the handful of the earth you are.
Because of its meadows, vast as a planet,
I have no other star. You are my replica
of the multiplying universe

Your wide eyes, are the only light I know
from extinguished constellations;
your skin throbs like the streak
of a meteor through rain.

Your hips were that much of the moon for me;
your deep mouth and its delights, that much sun;
your heart, fiery with its long red rays,

was that much ardent light, like honey in the shade.
So I pass across your burning form, kissing
you – compact and planetary, my dove, my globe.

4 thoughts on “Thankful moments (troibun)”

  1. Oh how absolutely wonderful Cheryl-Lynn! Truly well done and although this is a new form, I have a sense you’ve mastered it and used it with great effect here. 🙂 I love the opening line of the sonnet too – and I think you’ve taken it and presented a story itself, that embraces the line and the entire poem as well – really – this is lovely! It’s more than a simple, on the face of it, telling – it’s many layered and I think you’ve captured the essences and whole-hearted deepness within – bravo! Thanks for playing the Sunday Writing prompt this week 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much for you beautiful comment, I am truly humbled! I have been using this form for over a year and love it as much as a haibun to tell a brief story or journal. With a comment like that, I will be sure to check in more often on Sundays [feeling real good…you have made my day!]

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      1. I’m glad that you’re inspired by the prompt and my comment – although, the comment is just the bonus, (I speak humbly) – the gift was in the creation, perhaps for both of us? And reading …. anyhow, I’m glad that you’re feeling uplifted 😀

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