flawless (haibun)

Looking out the window, she takes note at this part of winter she enjoys so much. Sitting comfortably in the warmth of her home, her furry friend sits by her side, content her mistress is home today.

She sees a car drive by covered in snow and only a small circle in the windshield brushed off to see. She sighs. She had strict rules about driving in winter and always took extra time to scrap the snow off all the windows of her car. “One less thing to worry about, now” she thought to herself, since she no longer had a car. No more stressing to get anywhere that public transit or a taxi couldn`t do just as well and safely.

white downy snow
flawless –
adorns the land

© Tournesol ’15/12/29

The Secret Keeper Prompt: PART | STONE | FLAW | STRICT | NOTE |

20 Replies to “flawless (haibun)”

    1. All four sides have to be cleared if you want to avoid getting a ticket here. But I’m such a chicken anyway before that law came through…I gotta see everywhere before I step on the gas. My son got a ticket last year for one window not being cleared in the back.

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      1. Oh wow. I don’t think NY state has a rule like that. I usually try to clear all the windows but if there’s ice, I often run out of time before I run out of windows to clean.

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  1. I love to watch the snow falling down but rarely do I drive in it. It has to be something pretty important I can’t cancel and reschedule. But if I do go out. I make sure my entire car is clear of snow. I mean everywhere. Roof. Windows. Engine hood. Bumpers. All around the lights. I like my car to look like it hasn’t been snowed on.

    I thought your story was a great opener. It really gets the reader involved in what you are writing immediately. Going without a car can be difficult where I live but we did the first two years we moved to the Green Mountains where last year it snowed almost everyday, if not all day and night too.

    I noticed 4 of the words and I am assuming you are using land for stone. If that is not so, then, my new computer and reading book glasses don’t see it. Let me know either way. The words weaved their way nicely through your story with a lovely poetic ending. – jk

    HAPPY NEW YEAR!

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    1. Thank you for your lovely comment and share. I had meant to write a flawless stone indeed as I was looking at a covered stones on my lawn. But I have not been well, and my mind does drift off into a fog these days. You know it is a law here to clean your car or you will get a ticket but it is more than just the windows. Just like you do, snow or pieces of ice stuck on the hood, dash or bumpers can go flying onto the cars behind you on highways…I know, I have been startled a few times in my life. I do like driving on fresh snow and you can hear it under your car…whoosh, whoosh and you have to keep up a steady speed not to get stuck.Those were the days I lived back home…very small town and loads of country roads. Happy New Year to you as well and thank you for hosting these fun prompts.

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      1. It is a good law. People in my town and surrounding area are mostly responsible drivers and keep their cars clean. No laws to do. Interesting to have to make such a law. It’s insane to drive with a small patch of sight through one’s windshield. It would drive me crazy.

        Don’t worry about omitting a word. I frankly think land is a good synonym for stone. After all, the ground it made of stones everywhere. It is okay to use synonyms.

        When I was in college, I was extremely brave and carefree, and dashing with my sports car through a snowstorm was fun. My car held the road perfectly. The engine in back makes its easier with the weight.

        I am pleased you enjoy the prompts. They will keep coming. I started them b/c I wanted to challenge myself. Now I have others who enjoy them as well.

        See you again. Blessings and wishes for the New Year. May it be great for you. -jk

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      2. That is a law here regarding the tires. Inspections every year on our cars. It stops pollution and makes for safer cars. At least we have that.

        So Québec has crazy drivers – Hmmm! 😉

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