coming home (kyoka)

pre-dawn cloudburst
flowers hang their heavy heads
old man heaves
coming home from Hurley’s Pub
hanging low away from mum

(c) Tournesol ’15

17 thoughts on “coming home (kyoka)

  1. A nice kyoka .. or maybe a tanka … in the sense that you wrote it very well dear friend … though I’ve got my doubts about up-chucking people being humorous 😉


    1. I wanted to make it a solo renga but left it as tanka. Enough was said. The hum our of course was more tongue in cheek. I had another I may share but on the other blog. I still chuckle thinking about it.


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