Ancestral home (haibun)

© Clr '15
© Clr ’15

She follows the inspector like a mid-day shadow. He scratches on his notepad, silently walking the perimeter of the weather-beaten house. It leans more towards the river now. She sighs with a heavy heart, not realizing how time and weather has bent the ancestral abode.

weighed memories
 sagging shoulders slope
weathered house bows

by the bank
feeder swings on rusted wire
lives perch

© Tournesol ’15

Written for Carp Diem “Weatherbeaten” meme

8 Replies to “Ancestral home (haibun)”

    1. Actually this is mostly fiction based on what I might be doing. My step father still lives in the home for as long as he wishes. I am glad actually so I can put off a lot of decisions.

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    1. True, that one sealed it, I agree; the birdfeeder is such a part of that house and my mom, when I saw the rusted wire, I think that haiku could have stood alone for this prompt.Thanks for taking the time to comment.

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  1. I must say that if only one haiku was needed to complete your haibun then my preference would be for the second, which has all the emotion and personalities of the ‘ancestral abode’ but manages to convey it by glancing at something else entirely, something small and inconsequential – very wabi/sabi (one or the other, I can never remember which is which) 🙂

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